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W.A.L.T:  Write a descriptive narrative

Success Criteria:

• Needs to describe the characters and setting  
  
  
• Needs to have the structure of a Narrative: introduction, problem, solution.
  
  
• Needs to have humor
  
  

Personal goal: maintain audience interest

One cold icey morning as I strolled through the mystical forest with trees as tall

as the eiffel tower and a river that sparkled like stars in the night and flows like

lightning strikes, I heard a shrill scream that made my soul cry. It sounded like

someone was fighting for their life I kept going because I wanted to see if I

could help. As I got closer I could hear a petite girl telling someone to stay

away and put it down repetitively. You could hear in her voice that she was

frightened but there was a sense of determination like she was going to get

through this no matter what.

When I got closer I peered around the angelic tree that flowed with the wind

and saw a girl sitting on the frozen, solid ground tied up in a thick rope stained

with the blood of others before her. It didn’t take much to see the cuts on her

face, with blood slowly oozing out of them, one of them one of the cuts lay

inches away from her silky mud like eyes that told her every emotion, like a

books tells a story. Meters away stood a large man with his back turned, he

was working at a table one of his freakishly large hands was in a bag as white

as fresh snow [which I found unusual because if he was going to kill or injure

her surely the blood would show.] Next to the bag lay a knife that was as

far-reaching as a new a pencil but you could tell that it would easily slit your

wrist. The man slowly raised his hand out of the bag, he held in his hand a gun.

I heard a gasp of air coming from the child , when I glanced over I saw a tear

rolled down her face she new that this would be the end.  

But this was not the end for her I would get her out of this. As he pointed the

gun at her I chucked to silver stones at him, one at his head and one at his

hand he dropped the gun on the autumn ground. Swiftly but silently when his

back was turned I kicked the back of his knee,  grabbed his head and swang

him to the ground. When he was down I kicked him repeatedly. Then went

over to the table grabbed the knife walked rapidly over to the girl with the knife

to my side trying not to scare her. She tried to move away but I grabbed the

rope and cut cut her free before she said anything. Tears filled her eyes she

was so grateful.

Bang! Gunshot. I suddenly realised that I forgot to take the gun. I slowly turn to

see the man on his knees his nose running like a red waterfall the gun pointed

at me with a smug look on his face.i can feel an excruciating pain in my leg. I

look down to see that a bullet went in my leg and there was now a hole filled

with blood. I did my best to get the girl  behind a tree but I didn't need to help her,

when I looked back she was limping behind a tree.

I ran toward him as fast as I could ignoring the pain in my leg he fires but

misses me then i tackle him to the ground with all my might punch him until he

lets go of the gun. Then grabbed the gun and shot him in the head three times.

I give a sigh of relief [it’s over].

I turn around and expect to see her smiling but she wasn't , instead she had

a terrible look on her face. Then the excitement wore off reality hits  I collapse

to the ground he didn't miss in fact he shot me in the chest. I lay my head in

the autumn leaves raise my head to the sky and breath in what might be my

last breath then i hear a type of chuckle coming from the girl she smiles a

smug look just like the man then she says “we got you”.

Thank you for reading I hope you enjoyed it and I would love to hear your

comments.